I am currently working on my first website advertisement. This post will be a listing on Witchvox.com. My next targeted site is Paganspace.net and then Facebook Fan pages.
Witchvox gives me the option of writing up to 3,000 words about the book in order to entice readers. I wrote the same introduction to the book I have at the top of this blog site but that was only 42 words! It is so difficult to pick out a perfect section of the book to advertise with.
I know it needs to be a piece with only a couple characters. This intensely narrows the choices as I have almost 30 main characters in the book, all complete with their own weird name and hair style.
This piece needs to have the LEAD character or at least one of the handful of next main characters. The scene I have posted below came to my mind first. It is right in the middle of the book. A discussion between Nyokara and my FAVORITE character named Noki. He is a quirky, mischievous boy with a sense of responsibility when in range with Nyokara. While he is usually goofy, this shows his hidden personality as he consoles his newest best friend. It also gives the reader a glimpse of how powers work in my story. This version I am posting is rough as it is the draft before proof reading.
"Nyokara put her hand out, her Loal streaming through her body, through her arm and into her palm. She pushed it out of her skin to gather in the air. When enough had conjured, Nyokara struck it with a mind match and it ignited.
The fire warmed her as she fed it with her Loal. Thankfully, she had used the right amount of it. The chance of burning her eyebrows off did cross her mind. The little bubble of flames flickered happily. Like a friend in the storm it smiled at her and she glowed brighter. Nyokara held onto the fire, but split her concentration. Summoning some Fiya leaves to her lap. She crumpled and ripped them with her Loal, making a little pile to set the fire onto. It burned next to her in its own seat of leaves, and she disconnected her Loal from it.
Nyokara looked the other direction, seeing a dry leaf hanging some distance away. She aimed, putting her arm out and thrusting Loal towards it. A large flamethrower erupted from her palm, dangerously licking her fingers as it streamed towards the leaf.
Nyokara let the heat go, leaving an ashy leaf stem on the far away branch. “Wow, this power is much more destructive than the others. It’s more directly a weapon then water or air.”
Nyokara turned back to her little fire, to find someone enjoying its company just as she was. She screamed.
“Nyokara. Do you always keep your Loal inside your body like that? As a fighter you should be constantly sensing for another person,” Noki told her.
“What are you doing here?” she asked, tucking her wet hair behind her ear. He was soaked too, dripping all over the branch. The white circles in his hair were converted into splotches. His height was decreased by a couple inches due to his head being wet down.
“Sneaking about. You should know this by now. As part of our group, we are constantly ready to scare someone. You don’t want to be kicked out of the group do you?” he asked, letting his legs hang off the side of the branch, kicking water from his shoes. “You were right. Bare foot was the right way to go, today.”
“Oh.” Nyokara looked away, shivering slightly.
“So. You can use both Fiya leaves and fire?” he asked.
“Um... yeah...” she answered quietly.
“Well, don’t be ashamed! You don’t have to lie to me. Especially, because I already figured it out. Go ahead and increase the fire if you’re cold. There’s no point in hiding it.”
The fire grew as Nyokara obeyed. “You already know?” she asked.
“Well. You know... I know some stuff. I also know you hide a lot from people. I can see it,” he tapped on his face next to his eye. “Nyokara. I meant it.” He smiled. “We’re friends. You can tell me stuff.”
“So you came all the way out here. Just to talk to me?” she asked.
“Yeah. So?” Noki leaned back on the branch. “It seemed like you weren’t gonna just come out and tell me what’s going on. So I started fishing for the information. Guessing isn’t working so well, why don’t you just tell me.”
“What do you want to know?” Nyokara asked quietly, pulling her legs up to her body and hugging them. He’s such a strange person. Friends? I thought me and the girls were friends. Is there another level? Are there different kinds of friends? Maybe... some friends see things better than other can. And he went out of his way to ask me about me. "
I personally, hate my writing. ^_^ I can't help but criticize it constantly. Hopefully, this will catch your attention as your opinion is the important one in the plot line of my series.
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